i was a bit surprised this sample essay was graded at band 7, higher than I thougt.
however, on a second thought, this essay has a very good structure: introdcution, main body and a conclusion. it answers the question well and presents good support to its arguments. ideas are linked by the effective use of cohensive devices.
For this kind of test, the biggest challenge will be how to get ideas. Chinese students are seldom asked to write over 250 words to present their arguments, thus they get stuck in generating ideas, particulary when they are asked to discuss from both sides.
I normlly select related articles from internet and send those articles to them before they start to write. reading might help them get some inspiration from others.